Отправлено: 09.03.10 22:14. Заголовок: Всероссийский дистанционный конкурс-проект «В гостях у Шерлока Холмса»

Всероссийский дистанционный конкурс-проект «В гостях у Шерлока Холмса»

Сроки проведения: 10-23 марта 2010 года
Подробности: http://eidos.ru/project/sherlock_holmes/2010/index.htm

Ведущая проекта:

Плотникова Наталья Ивановна, сотрудник кафедры иностранных языков ЦДО "Эйдос"

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 12:36. Заголовок: Shark`s dims. Ha..

Shark`s dims.
Halfisch(germ.) – shark.
One rainy morning Mr. Sherlock Holmes is visited at his house, Baker street,221-b, by the shocked Constable of Her Majesty the Queen. His news is incredible: the headdresses of all the Guardsmen of Her Majesty the Queen have been stolen. Bearskins – their pride and privilege! In three days an outstanding historic procession is to take place – the Queens’ equipage with the Guardsmen’s participation. If the bearskins are not found – a shame on the nation! The best detectives are involved. But the only hope is Sherlock Holmes. How will the crime of the century be solved? The great detective starts building a logic chain: if he could understand what for the cunning and ingenious thieves needed to take the Guardsmen’s famous attributes, he would manage to be on the track of the criminal
* * *
-You know, Watson, this crime is doomed to fail – said Holmes smiling after the constable`s departure – I’m sure everything is rather primitive in this mysterious situation. We will have investigated this thing by the evening, I think.
Having said so, he left the room.
I had not seen him till the evening –my medical practice does not allow me to leave my patients even for the sake of my close friend. Having finished my pursuit I returned to Baker street and started waiting for Holmes. As a result I fell asleep and was awaken by the squeak of the stairs.
- Who is here? Oh, this is you, Watson – said somebody in the darkness. – Switch on the light and try to find something hot to drink. I`m chilled to the marrow. But don`t disturb Mrs. Hudson please.
When I was a regimental doctor I was good at cooking warming beverage. Well, I hope that Mrs. Hudson won`t be angry if I exercise my sway over her kitchen.
- Oh, my God! Holmes, you are looking so loathsome! – amazingly exclaimed I. Really, my friend resembled a dirty pauper from the docks but not a detective.
- Watson, this story is worse than I expected – said Holmes, taking a drink.
Having made a pipe draw ,he continued:
- Though, Constable Parker mentioned urgency of the case he didn`t take into account lots of details. Probably, it was the fault of his bosses. Or he felt shy in front of you, a strict doctor – grinned Holmes.
In a minute Holmes said:
- I won`t go into details, I will say only one thing: the Queen`s equipage with Guardsmen`s participation will take place by all means. Who was eager to take these bearskins, judge for yourself? It is only ground for committing another more severe crime. As a matter of fact, I have found the bearskins already. By the way, Watson – said Holmes with great animation – what do you know about the poison of the snake Oxyuranus microlepidotus?
-You know, that I have no information. Aren`t you going to speak?
- It is called a “cruel snake” and it speaks for itself.. It lives only in Australia and its poison is fifty times stronger than cobra`s one.
- The Minister for Foreign Affairs, Richard Halfisch, had been killed by exactly the same poison. I found his body near the bearskins in the basement of one of the suburbs.
I gave him a puzzled look.
- Do you really know it? It can`t be a plot!
- - Of course not, my dear. I`m sure you are eager to ask me lots of questions – said Holmes melancholically. – But I`m afraid I won`t be able to satisfy your curiosity to the full extent. So, I will only enumerate the facts. Here they are: absurd crime with the aim of committing another crime. One of the accomplices, sir Halfisch, is found dead in the docks of the East-End. All the bearskins are found there too. Tops of them are ripped off.
- You are certain to have investigated it. But how?
- It is elementary, my dear Watson. Dirt in the East- End docks is unique. Ether the colour or the smell speak for themselves. This very dirt was found by me in the store-room of Her Majesty`s palace. Valiant detectives of Scotland-Yard had missed it. And the criminal behaved too absently: haste prevented them from hiding evidence. They left a lot of traces , which could be easily found by such an experienced investigator as me. It was as easy for me, as difference of symptoms of flu and symptoms of some serious disease. Though they were identical sometimes.
Holmes stopped talking and stared at the fire in the fireplace. Meanwhile the clock in the living room struck twice. The sound seemed to awaken Sherlock Holmes and he said smiling:
- Go to bed, Watson. I`ll tell you all this story in details tomorrow morning. And the criminals are sure to have been apprehended by that moment.
I climbed upstairs, went to bed, but could not fall asleep. Strange ideas and pictures crowded in my mind: lots of Guardsmen`s bearskins, ripped off tops, huge venomous snake, creeping along the rotten channel of the suburb, some indefinite opium smoking house, poor sir Richard – in short, pieces of incoherent picture, which I tried to realized. Then I failed…
* * *
But for the military habit, your narrator would have been dead already. I don`t know what made me awake: rustle, foreboding of evil or thirst. Having opened my eyes I saw two silhouettes in the darkness of the morning. They were unlikely to notice me open the eyes,as they were searching for something in the drawers of my desk.
I turned my head a little, trying to understand whether I would be able to reach and take the revolver, lying on the night-table.
Suddenly one of the silhouettes bumped against the bookcase and swore.
- Deuce take it, Emmy! You will awake him – whispered male`s voice
- -Go and check whether the detective is sleeping – answered him the female voice.
I closed my eyes and pretended to be sleeping. I felt somebody`s breath quite near me.
Some minutes of wearisome expectation followed…
- Everything is alright. He is sleeping.
Suddenly somebody knocked at my door.
- Watson, wake up and get ready! I have found the criminals!
Emmy`s constrained voice said:

- Oh, Joe! The game is up…
However the lady wasn’t confused or frightened. Having run up to my bed, she gripped a pillow and threw it on my face. She started to smother me.
- Hold him, Joe!
So Joe grabbed my hands firmly.
I desperately tried to break away from him but all my attempts were futile: Joe and Emmy smothered me very quickly.
The door trembled. more and more . Of course Holmes understood that something was going wrong. Or may be it wasn`t him?
- Hurry up, Emmy! – wheezed Joe.
Crackle…noise…tramp…
* * *
I recovered. The first thing I saw was an anxious face of my friend
- Watson, thanks God , you are all right – said Holmes hastily. –Sorry, I should not have exposed you to such a danger. Put on your clothes and come downstairs.

When I came there the first thing to attract my attention was the stained floor. “Poor Mrs. Hudson” – thought I.
- Watson, aren`t you hungry? Can it really be true? – asked Holmes entering the dinning-room.
- - Certainly not – said I.
Nevertheless I took my place at the table and put some spoonfuls of oatmeal porridge on the plate. While I was eating, my friend was watching me as a considerate doctor, taking care of a recovering patient.
After breakfast we made ourselves comfortable in the armchairs in front of the fireplace and Sherlock Holmes started his narration.
- When the young man, sir Richard Halfisch, got the post of the Minister for Foreign Affairs his financial situation left much to be desired. Inheritance testamented to him by his father, colonel Gorge Halfisch, consisted of debts and dubious will.
With these words Holmes extracted a piece of paper from his pocket and handed it to me. A Gaurdsman’s bearskin was drawn there. Some kind of a diadem was painted next to it and the arrow pointed to the top of the bearskin. At the side a column of figures was written with the ink pencil.
- It was the only thing having been left by sir Gorge to his son. Probably sir Halfisch would not have made up his mind to commit such a shady enterprise, but for his wife, Emmy. So Emmy brought her Australian lover pretending to be a hired worker.
They had taken and carried everything to the docks working three together. While you were recovering upstairs, Emmy pleaded that she had poisoned her husband, having added snake`s poison into his tea. Instead of living the city, Emmy and Joe tried to steal the will. But due to irony of fate they mixed the rooms.
Holmes smiled sadly and lit his favorite pipe.
- You know the next adventures. You were the participant of them.
I sighed.
- Oh, Holmes, you have investigated so many crimes with me, being an eye-witness , and still, I wonder how you manage to do it?
- - Everything is very simple, my dear friend – smiled Holmes. – Here is the chain of events: death of sir Gorge, appointment of sir Richard to the post of the Minister for Foreign Affairs, stealing of bearskins, body of sir Richard, poison of Australian snake…It is not easy to find the logical chain, but when you do it - the result is clear.
Sherlock Holmes settled back, closed his eyes and took the violin…

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 18:49. Заголовок: Емельянов Иван Oh, y..

Емельянов Иван Oh, your story was very bright and so theatrical! I like creative things and your story was that I needed.
Власова Наташа Natasha, I liked your story very much! You showed that usual cases could spoil important events. You have got very exact descriptions of London in 19th century.
Benzin I loved your story! You combined love, politics and duty into one fascinating story. I couldn't broke away from the computer! And I liked the head of your story! It's very mysterious.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 19:29. Заголовок: Benzin Dear Ekate..

Benzin


Dear Ekaterina,

I like your story “Shark’s dims”. I couldn’t imagine that Watson could be killed. It’s nice that Sherlock Holmes came in time, it was very interesting.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 12:38. Заголовок: I like Natasha Vlas..

I like Natasha Vlasova`s story . It reveals the spirit of epoch. It grabs attentions from the first things. The atmosphere is very natural but the title is too big.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 12:42. Заголовок: My comments. To Taus..

My comments.
To Tausneva:
It’s really fascinating to read your story. You have created an unusual plot. And it inspires me to write a new detective.
To Kozlova:
I’m fond of mysterious things, so I enjoyed your story, It’s about the dwarfs and it’s really amazing. And I like your idea to connect the plot of the story with the circus. There are no murders and I prefer it!
To Tzaryova:
You have created the really political detective story, both children and adults like this story.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 12:44. Заголовок: I like Natasha Vlaso..

цитата:

I like Natasha Vlasova`s story . It reveals the spirit of epoch. It grabs attentions from the first things. The atmosphere is very natural but the title is too big.

The title isn't big:)
The title is: Disservice, more harm than good

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 12:52. Заголовок: Рефлексия: 1)За это..

Рефлексия:

1)За этот проект я успела понять,
Как важно и нужно нам книги читать.
Как сложно бывает рассказ написать,
Ведь это не чиркнул и лег на кровать.
Здесь нужно смекалку свою проявлять.
Но и смекалкой все не кончается,
С этого дело лишь начинается.
Нужно уметь людей завлекать,
Писать интересно, чтоб всех удивлять.
Не только идея рассказа важна,
Красивая фраза в названье нужна.
Интрига, тайна и метод дедуктивный
Помогут создать нам сюжет старинный.
Английский язык нас по жизни продвигает,
И грани новые нам открывает.

2)Как только о проекте я узнала,
Так сразу детектив писать я стала.
Работала над ним и ночь и день,
И было совершенно мне не лень.
Своих героев интересно представлять.
И жизнь в рассказе вместе с ними проживать.
Идеи в детективе воплощать,
Придумывать загадки и самой их все решать.
Общение на форумах меня не удивляет,
Оно не ново для меня и ничего не открывает.
Мне больше нравится писать
Или работы конкурсантов почитать.

3)Когда детектив я свой писала,
То времени счет совсем я теряла.
Могла начать и утром ранним,
Как только солнышко взошло.
Писать, писать и не заметить,
Как время быстро всё прошло.
А позже выглянув в окно,
Я понимала: уж солнце спряталось давно.
И это меня совсем не пугало,
Ведь я не попусту день потеряла.
И очень приятно осознавать,
Что мой рассказ сможет кто-то читать.

4)Немало сложностей в проекте было:
То вовремя сдавать не получалось,
То попросту заданье забывалось.
Но в сроки уложиться мы старались,
И каждый день по всем вопросом собирались.
Я сложность испытала лишь в одном:
Мне постоянно не хватало времени ни ночью и ни днем.
И очень сложно бывает писать,
Когда рядом кровать и слишком хочется спать.
Но сон свой побороть я успевала,
Ведь о хорошем результате я мечтала.

5)Организаторам конкурса хочу дать совет:
Старайтесь лучше рекламировать проект.
Людей в нем было не слишком много,
Но не судите за критику строго.
Ребятам я лишь хочу пожелать,
Чтоб детективы продолжали писать.
Рассказы их я прочитала,
И, если честно, не ожидала.
У каждого разные мысли и сюжеты,
Нам можно издать книгу или печатать газеты.
Себе я хочу подзатыльник дать!
Нельзя так со сроками затягивать.
Я получала задание и откладывала иногда,
Слава Богу, вспоминала всегда.
Так вот мой совет себе:
Не заостряйся на посторонней ерунде.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 12:58. Заголовок: Natasha! Why did you..

Natasha! Why did you choose this citation of Oscar Wilde? Do you agree with him?
Ivan! Your detective is very similar to Conan Doyle.Do you want to be a writer?
Danil,do you think your story can be really,in our life?

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 19:02. Заголовок: Lesya Panasko пишет:..

Lesya Panasko пишет:

цитата:

Ivan! Your detective is very similar to Conan Doyle.Do you want to be a writer?

Dear Lesya,

Oh, no!!! It was my first story, and it was gave to me hardly.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 14:08. Заголовок: Answers

1. Я поняла, что писать рассказы на английском несложно. Нужно только сформулировать тему, и все получится само собой. Хотя это был мой первый опыт работы над таким большим рассказом, я думаю, что справилась. Я научилась выражать свои мысли в художественном произведении, а не просто в обычной речи. Я ценю приобретенный опыт, и думаю, что мне это пригодится
2. Мне понравилось обсуждать с другими участниками проекта какие-либо вопросы. Это было очень интресно! Я была рада узнать, что другие думают о моих мыслях. И их ответы и вопросы я читала с огромным удовольствием! Я поняла, что даже самых разных людей может объединить какая-либо общая цель и задача.
3. Выполняя работу, я чувствовала необыкновенное воодушевление. Это был не первый проект на английском языке, но все равно я с удовольствием выполняла свою работу, пытаясь достичь поставленных целей.
4. Основной трудностью была нехватка времени. Ведь помимо школы были и другие занятия. И все же я постаралась сосредоточиться на работе, и у меня получилось. Другой проблемой была нехватка воображения. Но тут уже мне помогло большое количество прочитанных книг и просмотренных фильмов.
5. Замечаний нет.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 15:31. Заголовок: Butler’s mistake Wa..

Butler’s mistake

Watson was going for a walk to the park when suddenly having looked at the newspaper, he read “Famous detective Sherlock Holmes solves baffling disappearance!!!"
Watson took a cab and hurried to his friend to Baker street 221-B.
Sherlock Holmes was very excited. He told Watson the following story.
Two days ago on the rainy morning a mysterious guest visited him. It was Constable of Her Majesty the Queen. His news was incredible: the Queen`s Guardsmen were missing their bear skins - their pride and privelege! The situation grew worse as it was the coming time of Queen`s jubelee!
Inside the Buckingham Palace everyone was preparing for this celebration. In three days an outstanding historic procession will be held- the Queen`s equipage with the Guardsmen`s participation. If the bearskins are not found - a shame on the nation!
"That means you are working on a case?" - asked Watson. He always found it pleasant to be once more in Sherlock Holmes`s office where so many unusual adventures had had their beginning.
"Yes, and I know the thief."
"How do you know?" asked Watson.
It is my business to know what other people don’t know." - Holmes smiled. Then Sherlock took an old newspaper and showed him a newspaper clipping.
"Servants are banned to keep puppies at the Queen`s palace."
"That’s true, but how does it explain the crime?"
Sherlock Holmes approached the desk and took out a small plate with the leftover of doggie`s food.
"I discovered it in the private room of the Queen`s butler. This is precisely what we need, Watson. It is a clue. Now we can find a thief. It is time to go to the palace to make the thief confess the crime."
They took a cab and drove to the palace. In half an hour Holmes was speaking with the highest administration of the palace.
"Please, let’s go to the underground room and look for the guilty." - said Holmes politely to the servants.
Then Sherlock Holmes and his friend Watson went straight to the underground room.
"Now," - said Sherlock Holmes, -" I will tell you the location of the bearskins. Watson, please,open this pantry."
Watson opened the door of a small, hidden among shabby curtains pantry. There were a lot of bearskins lying on the shelves. Some of them were ragged.
"But who is the thief?"
"And who is responsible for the upkeep of the Queen’s corgis? - asked Sherlock Holmes and took out from the corner of the pantry the dog’s collar which had a round disk that carried the words ”HM The Queen”
“We have the only most caring dog-owner at the palace. He is Paul Ford and he is Her Majesty’s butler.”-said one of the servants in a low voice. Suddenly a slight sound of barking reached Watson’s ears. Everyone turned to the farthest door of the corridor.

One of the servants opened the door and all the people saw two little sleepy puppies. When the light blinded them, they greeted the strangers with a chorus of growls and barks. Holmes laughed: ”I admit, they are to blame!”
"It was like that," – continued Holmes. "Butler loved his little doggies very much and used to hide the puppies in the basement. But he didn’t expect the maid to fetch there some bearskins to get dry after the laundry. While the butler was absent, the fighting puppies tore the headdresses into pieces. But when the butler saw it, he was scared to death and hid the bearskins in this pantry" In haste he left a small plate for a dog feeding in the kitchen for servants. It was a big mistake…
All kept silence.
"Look!" - said Holmes suddenly.
Watson turned his head and saw a shadow pass over the window.
"What is it?" - asked Watson.
"The butler," - explained Holmes. "I think we’ll never see him again”

2. My comments.
To Emel’yanov:
Interesting plot and touching outcome. And what a gentleman Sherlock Holmes is! I like this story!

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 15:32. Заголовок: Рефлексия 1. Научил..

Рефлексия

1. Научилась писать рассказы, пополнила словарный запас.
2. Больше всего понравилось писать рассказы, потому что здесь можно было проявить себя больше всего.
3. Увлекал процесс написания рассказа.
4. Не хватало времени.
5. Замечаний нет.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 16:39. Заголовок: Dear Natalia Ivanovn..

Dear Natalia Ivanovna, my dear participants,
First of all I want to thank everyone for a completed task. There is pride in what we have done together. I couldn't imagine how talented my students are! Natasha Vlasova, you have my complete respect as your poems make my heart proud of you and our school you represent in the contest!Thanks a lot for your mobility and talent, of course!
Certainly I tried to be the driving force of the project, but,Natalia Ivanovna, I didn't influence my students, gave them freedom in choice and slightly corrected some papers as I am sure correction doesn't always lead to an improvement but very often undermines the students' confidence. The idea of the contest is super! When we started the project I was greatly surprised how little my students know about Conan Doyle and his immortal character Sherlock Holmes.Many other students have never read or heard about Sherlock. And the first important merit of the contest is that it can motivate a student to read widely , to enable him to seek more and more knowledge and it's very important!
The project teaches children to be responsible for everything they do, to be interested in English Literature and have a burning desire to learn and love.
But you also invited the junior students ( Year 5-6) to take part in the competition,and I think some tasks, questions were not relevant to the age level, besides, I wish some assignments could be more creative! And why was the task given in Russian and the students should answer it in English? And certainly-the time limit! Some tasks were to be done on the days off.We, teachers, don't have the right to make children work on Sundays, their parents can make a complain to the highest administration. It's easy nowadays. And they are right as students are overloaded today.
So, thanks a lot for your ideas. We all enjoyed keeping ourselves busy and found the project incredibly interesting and useful!!

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 17:39. Заголовок: Natasha! Why did you..

цитата:

Natasha! Why did you choose this citation of Oscar Wilde? Do you agree with him?

Dear Lesya,
As I think detective stories contain a lot of information and a good, old hand detective must be able to take off the smallest details even from the grain of mud. But unfortunately, there are both good and bad characters. And they also can use this valuable information.

 Отправлено: 22.03.10 17:57. Заголовок: Dear Benzin, As I ha..

Dear Benzin,
As I have already said, your story is really fascinating and exciting. And I can't imagine how hard it was to create so wonderful detective story! And how did you do it for so short term?

 Отправлено: 23.03.10 21:21. Заголовок: Hello, dear particip..

Hello, dear participants!
First of all I would like to congratulate you with a very successful and fruitful start of writing stories. Moreover, it is a great contribution to the memory of an outstanding writer, Conan Doyle. Most of your stories have proved that the detective genre will live for ever. Thank you, dear Galina Ivanovna, for such a friendly team, trying to show their best and making efforts to get to the top where Pegas is spreading his wings!
And now I would like to answer the questions you have addressed during your discussions at your “working site” (I mean in class).
Kozlova: “Why are there so few members of the contest? Whose mistake is it?”
This contest is the first in the history of the distant contests having ever been arranged in commemoration of the literal inheritance of Conan Doyle. Obviously, there appeared some fear from the side of the part of potential applicators. Another reason is that there are a number of distant arrangements, such as projects, courses, Olympiads, which are held by Eidos. The visitors of Eidos’s web-site have chosen some other items among the variety of the suggested ones. I shan’t spread upon the other reasons, but I believe you did not regret for having taken part in this contest.
Tsaryova: “Shall we get your comments in the forum after the contest has finished?”
My short comment s will follow very soon.
Shubina: “What did you expect of this contest? Has it justified your expectactions?”
I was sure that the most talented and courageous persons can only contest with that very Conan Doyle! But I could not imagine that some of your stories were at such a high level from the professional point of view of the story-maker. Your have been very ardent and diligent in writing, shown psychological depth, fantasy and irony and of course, love and devotion to the great English master of detectives. Some of your works have really exceeded my expectations .
Rakovetskaya: “Some tasks were too difficult. We needed more time to complete them.”
I agree with you. A good story needs time and contemplation. But the more you brain is plunged with work, the more speedy it works and the productivity is higher, isn’t it?

 Отправлено: 23.03.10 23:07. Заголовок: Reply to Galina Korzhova's Remarks

Dear Galina Ivanovna,
I appreciate your remarks and comments very much. Frankly speaking, when something is done for the first time, it seldom occurs that everything goes tiptop. Initially the project was proposed to be for elder schoolchildren. However at the end the age limit was lowered. In future the tasks might be subdivided into groups: for junior and senior participants. For the first group the tasks will be more simple, for sure.
As for the assignments are concerned, your suggestion is worth being thought over.
As for the tasks in Russian, all the information, recommendations, requirements for work presentation are supposed to be in Russian in order to get familiar with them without any problems. With regard to the chat tasks – if younger children took part in the chat lesson, they would be able to answer in Russian. It is important to learn not to be afraid of the questions, as well as to express one’s own opinion and find arguments.
And the last point I would like to touch upon is the time limit. If Eidos contests are to be considered as supplementary home lessons, a sort of self-tuition, the parents should be glad only, when their beloved offspring is occupied by mental activity, of course, within reasonable limits. Nevertheless, the question of more effective time schedule will be discussed with Eidos project management.
In conclusion, I would like to thank you for your kind attention to the project, active and fruitful work and wish your students and you new discoveries in the process of the world cognition.

 Отправлено: 24.03.10 22:14. Заголовок: My Comments to the Works of the Participants

Здравствуйте, уважаемые участники!

Чтобы избежать каких-либо неясностей в моих комментариях, они оформлены на русском языке.
Учащиеся показали хорошее знание языка, чувство стиля, проявили фантазию в выборе действующих лиц и мотивов преступления, старание, трудолюбие и, тем самым, доказали свою любовь к детективному жанру. Однако, не всем хватило времени, чтобы до конца продумать сюжетную линию и использовать дедуктивный метод. Есть, над чем трудиться при написании в дальнейшем собственных рассказов! А теперь переходим к комментариям по каждой из работ.
Власова Наташа: законченный рассказ, яркие образы героев, выдержан полностью стиль Конана Дойля, интрига сохранена до конца рассказа, отличный английский, качественное оформление, пожелание – более обострить сюжетную линию, когда кратковременное снижение напряжения сменяется очередным захватывающим событием.
Козлова Яна: яркие образы, такое ощущение, что автор точно знает место и особенности хранения этих специфических головных уборов, оригинальность изложения двигателя сюжета – конфликта, присутствие драматизма, лёгкой иронии. Пожелание: попробовать себя в более жёстком стиле изложения, показать психологический поединок с грозным преступником (типа профессора Мориарти), должно получиться.
Царева Екатерина: присутствует интрига, хорошее нагнетание сюжета, оригинальные находки в названиях, использование парадоксов, пожелание – не «перебарщивать» с деталями для более стремительного развития сюжета, придумать название рассказа.
Емельянов Иван: в рассказе отражена психология характеров, они убедительны, сработал дедуктивный метод, обоснованно милосердие, проявленное детективом, хороший английский, красивое оформление рассказа. Пожелание – добавить в рассказ портреты Ms. Uorder и Ben Taylor.
Юрк Данил: стиль Конана Дойл сохранён, удачные находки в описании деталей, пожелание: более чётко прописывать «любовную линию» рассказа, не очень убедительно изложена причина преступления.
Тауснева Анастасия: оригинальная причина кражи, деликатная развязка в стиле «Ох, уж этот дворецкий», но для полноценного развития сюжета, видимо, не хватило времени.
Граванов Андрей: в рассказе присутствует интрига, свойственная произведениям Шерлока Холмса, пожелание: более глубоко продумать сюжет, не совсем понятно, почему королевская охрана могла стать похитителем и именно в указанное автором время, некоторые выражения не точно передают содержание на английском языке.
Раковецкая Ольга: автору, видимо, не хватило времени на продумывание и оформление сюжета. Но по построению сюжетной линии видна попытка развития динамики действий через диалоги; обратить внимание на оформление рассказа,
Шубина Юлия: намечена основа, вокруг которой должен быть выстроен сюжет, но психологически не убедительно, что опытный констебль совершил кражу ради продажи на аукционе. Ведь вещи, попадающие на аукцион, вначале тщательно проверяются на предмет их легальности. Нужно более тщательно продумать цель кражи.
Олеся Панаско: обозначен сюжет, действующие лица, но желательно выбрать свою тему (не повторяться с аукционом); обратить внимание на построение конструкций английского языка.
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Plotnikova Natalia Ivanovna
Project coordinator.

 Отправлено: 08.07.11 04:04. Заголовок: Amummaloubpam

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